Join for FREE | Take the Tour Lost Password?
Shop deviantART for the
holidays and save BIG!
Click here! :holly:
[x]

deviantART

 


When you see that the world isn’t so bad after all
There’s war and suffering but now they seem so small;
For this   intense feeling,   far too CoMpLEx for the human mind to understand
Has embarked upon your innocent and inexperienced mind.
And suddenly every thing seems perfect
And somehow you’ve found what you did not go out to find.

Such a strange feeling,
Yet pleasurable.
You feel your chest tighten up
And your mind free from all;

All worry, heartache, sorrow and stress
For you know this is the ultimate happiness.
How can all this be labelled as one word?
How can this emotion be expressed?

And all you want is to hold them
In your arms and never let go.
And all you want is to touch them
And caress them, just so they know
Of your devotion.

And you would cry
At the thought of them going.
And you would die
Just for them to be happy.

If they asked you to, you would
And with one look, you understood
Every thought or feeling in their body,
Which is an exact duplicate of yours at that moment in time.

They like you for you;
You don’t have to hide.
And you would move the earth
To be at their side.

And the feeling is mutual –
You may only be one person to the world,
But suddenly you are the world to one person.
And you feel an outbreak of extreme pleasure

… And then you know it’s love.
©2004-2009 ~0-0-0-0-EJT-0-0-0-0
:icon0-0-0-0-ejt-0-0-0-0:

Author's Comments

Not exactly a masterpiece, well far from it actually... but an attempt at least.
It clearly needs editing and isn't quite there yet, but I think it gets the idea across, that's the most important thing.
(",)

Comments


love 0 0 joy 0 0 wow 0 0 mad 0 0 sad 0 0 fear 0 0 neutral 0 0
:iconkinho:
wow ur poetry is jus like elliot's(how symbolic). I like how u played with the word 'complex', nice, very original, well at least to be used like dis. I can definately relate to this, though not as good i think someone would, lol, ;), rite?

--
Click me => :relaxed:
:iconaoshi-shinomori-:
... (speechless)
I love it, so much, this is a masterpiece, you managed to express your feelings so well.

Aoshi

--
"One should have insight into this world of dreams that passes in the twinkling of an eye." Hojo Shigetoki (1198-1261) :katana:
:iconchovinunfo:
Hahahaha... Bobsquat likes the poem, and I like it too!! Does that mean that I am also Bobsquat? GASP! Anyhow, what I like about this poem is that there is rhyming, but it's a bit scattered, so it doesn't seem forced at all!! The theme is good, but like King Whore said... Not as impacting to us as it is to the REAL Bobsquat (Aoshi)!

Saf
:iconaoshi-shinomori-:
BOBSQUAT IS MY NAME

Aoshi

--
"One should have insight into this world of dreams that passes in the twinkling of an eye." Hojo Shigetoki (1198-1261) :katana:
:icon0-0-0-0-ejt-0-0-0-0:
hehe, lol, i just felt i haaaaadd to submit something on here b4 u lot got REELI pissed off!
hmm, it's not that good, i dnt like the way the rhyming is scattered. thanks 4 all ur positive comments tho! (but reeli - u dnt have 2 lie!) (",) emma x x

--
63 page views and yet no deviations...wahoo! :)
:iconkinho:
WE DONT HAVE TO LIE??? ok ur poem suks. lol, IM JUS JOKIN, it really is nice. and i was jus jokin bout the whole u not liking me thing, hehe, no worries, i know ur nice :D. and u can get my email on my userpage (so polite of u to actually ask b4 u added me, hehe), later

--
Click me => :relaxed:
:icon0-0-0-0-ejt-0-0-0-0:
hehe, cool, thought i offended sum there...! ok, i'll add u! byez (",)

--
63 page views and yet no deviations...wahoo! :)

Details

April 29, 2004
1.7 KB

Statistics

7
1 [who?]
58 (0 today)
6 (0 today)

Share

Link
Thumb

Site Map